Rearranging the website

My website's been neglected for far too long, so I thought I'd Do Something about it. I need to do some actual updates, but the first thing I've done today is what might look like a trivial change to the index page. Please play spot the difference and tell me which one you prefer:

ETA: consensus was that the third option was best, so I've switched to that and shortened it even more.

Something I did a while back was add the word count to the main page for one of the books. The plan was to do this for all the books if I could get it looking reasonably uncluttered, but I haven't got around to doing it yet. So does this look too horribly cluttered?

http://www.julesjones.com/fiction/details/promisestokeep.html

And I'd fiddled with the index bar on the Main page to add "This page:" to the row of links for content on the page itself and related pages, to help distinguish it from the row of top-level links to other sections of the site:

http://www.julesjones.com/main.html

Any comments?